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there aren't words in the English language
to properly describe this loss. blackness.
blink out. fade out. go out. not
with a bang, but a whimper, your
thoughts won't unknot
from my own, i hear you in my dreams;
sleeping is my obituary for everyone
i feared--

   my antithesis, i'm so fucking terrified
you were right and that some part of me
needed you for a genuine reason.
emotion is not bottomless and you
are not forever. i miss you. i miss
how easily you made me cry. stale
mornings and birds that fly the wrong
direction are nothing compared to the way
you relit the world, birthing new stars
every time you touched something
you pretended to understand.
i never believed in your god, but i hope
you'll forward the prayers i sent
you.

   my earthly limitation, i'm sorry
you hurt so bad but i'm glad
it's directed at me. you should never
have to hold all that on your
own. emptiness cannot be ignored
or displaced; i wish i was better
at listening.    tomorrow
will be better.    tomorrow
 we will be better.

    my semicolons, goodbye is
the heaviest word caught on my
tongue. i can't speak without
thinking of you, i can't sing
without hearing you cry at night
when you thought everyone was asleep,
i can't watch the sunbeams fragment
on the pavement without remembering
how you fantasized about getting
out. one day; the hollow lies
painted on the walls were never enough.
the chalky sunsets promised us
a life worth living. one day;
never, never, never give up. even
famous philanthropists knew the
threshold we had lived on all
our lives. one day; i'm so sorry
i didn't write back. i'm so sorry
i failed you. that's the only promise
i've ever kept.
more letters to people who won't read them

"emotion is not bottomless" j.w.
"tomorrow will be better" unknown
"never, never, never give up" winston churchill

i miss most my ability to displace blame through recognition of character
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"that's the only promise i've ever kept"

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peaceinnadisworld Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Student Artist
this is the way the world ends
this is the way the world ends
this is the way the world ends...
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you get it <3
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DetoxingDeath Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Stuff like this keeps me coming back. I'M AN ADDICT I NEED HELP. And a couple really awesome people.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're lovely <3
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
oh. oh. this is wonderful. you write such a lively ache: i feel yiur pain.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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ryka-the-fallen Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014
those last two sentences, hard-hitting
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is very well written. Quite emotional and fluid to read. There is a lot that I can relate to and it starts well and ends well.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome.
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etykut Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student General Artist
Beautiful work, sometimes writing letters that will never reach their addressees allow you to say so much more...

How I wish that some things were forever, and some things weren't.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much for your thoughts <3
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etykut Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student General Artist
:iconbowplz:
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
thank you for the emotional rollercoaster;
(i am not myself but)this is really powerful 
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much <3
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Perfling Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student General Artist
sleeping is my obituary for everyone
i feared--

:heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Student Writer
you make me want to cry in the best way possible, you know? :tighthug:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student Writer
Welcome :)
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Okay wait, I'm going to do this. I'm going to try and write a real comment this time. Normally I read your poems really quickly in a blur and they strike me with way too emotion so I have to leave, and when I come back to fave and comment I've lost the ability to capture what it is about them that hit me so hard, but I won't go away this time. >>
The third line: perfect repetition. That is all. 

Okay, the imagery in this one is particularly powerful. You juxtapose perfectly stark, simply-stated emotion ("i'm so fucking terrified," "i miss you") with amazing images ("stale / mornings and birds that fly the wrong / direction"). This works super well because... reasons. I made the decision to leave you this in-depth comment and just realized doing it in a state of sleep deprivation is not my soundest choice ever. 

emptiness cannot be ignored
or displaced

Yes. Thank you. 
I love the repetition in this stanza as well, and it actually took me three or four readings to notice the "we" slid into the second one, which is just so perfectly desperate, something dully hopeful slid into the same cycle of... things happening the way they happen. 

i can't speak without
thinking of you, i can't sing 
without hearing you cry at night 
when you thought everyone was asleep, 
i can't watch the sunbeams fragment
on the pavement without remembering
how you fantasized about getting
out.

Another example of a potent emotion stated with the most dazzling imagery, those sunbeams fragmenting are just gorgeous and also this part almost made me cry again. I'm very very good at almost crying these days, but I'd be glad to cry at something as beautiful as this. (If I had one complaint here, it would be that you ended a line on the word "getting," which is a word that I hate, but I can see how it works here, bring the "out" back in, so actually... nix that complaint?)

the hollow lies
painted on the walls were never enough

I think this is pretty.



...look it keeps putting /span at the end of my message and I don't know why but I'm too tired to keep trying to get rid of it. So uh. You wrote a really lovely poem again. Thanks for continuing to do that. <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ahahahahah i absolutely adore your sleep deprivated state. thank you so much for your feedback and for helping me know what i did well. technology sucks but you are eternally lovely. thank you, as always <3
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hm, not sure that's a logical response, my sleep deprived state tends to be a little out of control. 
...it's weird that I'm about to thank you for your thank you message, but thank YOU, you're altogether too kind. <3
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
aaaaaaaaaaan then it just got rid of the end span and made a bunch of things italic that shouldn't have been
i dislike technology
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Karinta Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Student General Artist
This sounds really really raw - but raw is good!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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Karinta Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student General Artist
You're welcome!
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Vallestin Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing, I love the style
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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nonetheIess Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Student Writer
wow this really really powerful & it describes everything im feeling right now
if youre feeling the same way i am so so so sorry
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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