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thank god for sleeping pills
and the man who gave me a bag
to quiet my mind.

thank god for boys with open hands
and curious minds and naïve hearts
who make me young because
god, you birthed me old
thank god

you birthed me old,
so I could be the one to
measure the livelihood of stars
while the others made
their childhood wishes
come true.

thank god I have a mind
that runs a million miles faster
than I ever could, because
I believe my heart is an hourglass
of honey and grime, and
I’m slowly running out of
time, and I fear
these days are numbered.

thank god for people
who write the words bleeding in my heart
without knowing I exist, thank god
for beauty and my understanding
that I only exist in relation to it
and in appreciation of what
I can’t become.

thank god for my rebirth
because I spent all those
eye-opening years of my life
sleeping behind the wheel, thank god
someone was there to wake
me up. (thank god that I can
weep for happiness and depression
in the same day, because it means
I’m finally here)

thank god for people I won’t remember
and memories that aren’t real
and for flutters, thank god for
the flutters in my heart and stomach
and my mind making me believe
I’m a habitat for butterflies, like
I can actually sustain something
surreal and good. thank god for
inconsistencies that defile
the inevitabilities that haunt me
in my dreams, thank god
I broke the patterns
I created for myself out of
binder paper and written
promises, written nooses,
thank god

I am not what I say I am.
thank god I’m a liar and
thank god there’s something
human in that, something perfect
tucked away inside of me
waiting to explode. thank god
I’m real enough to explode,
and not the imaginary
entity scrawled upon
sorry walls; thank you god,

because I survived.
stolen from *your-methamphetamine [link] who was replying to ~diddlyhohum [link]

it's nice to be happy enough to be thankful for something

(sorry if this is a little more of me than you'd wanted to read)
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wonenownlee Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I've actually submitted a few pieces myself it you ever care to take a look :bow:wonenownlee.deviantart.com/gal…
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was so honored she featured me! thank you for commenting and sharing your work :love:
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wonenownlee Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
riseandbe.deviantart.com/journ… featured this and I am so glad, I love it and I don't usually take to literary~! :clap:
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Just stopping by to let you know you've been featured in my "More Love For Favorites" Series, here: fav.me/d6iersq
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wonenownlee Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:wave: Hi, and thank you so much for the feature, it means a lot to me! :dance: :hug::love::blowkiss:
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Happy to hear it! You're more than welcome. =D
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're precious :tighthug: can't wait to look at the other works
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't believe that anyone regrets any piece of you, and its discovery, any more than their last breath before they found you and found out that
they're not alone
and never were.

We exist for you
and from
you
are our center
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:worship:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013   General Artist
this is just so honest and awe-inspiring, maddielove. :tighthug:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :huggle:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013   General Artist
reading your work is always awe-inspiring :heart: :heart: :heart:
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fox-ninja97 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Student Writer
I'm kind of at a loss for words, because I can't correctly describe to you the feeling this has caused in me. It's like.... Peace and pain and sadness and relief... And gratitude.

Thank you.

I could go into more technical things, how I liked the flow and that the repetition was brilliant and felt natural, but I just... Can't right now...
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's such an honor to know something i wrote had an impact <3 thank you so much
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Ashes-From-Fire Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
Wowza -beautiful poem!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! <3
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Tux-boi Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013
We all have a dark side to our souls, to what ever god you hold dear, (and yes that includes goddesses too) you should see how black mine is. Its not easy to forgive yourself. And to love what you can do. All you can do is the best you can.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
absolutely :heart:
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Cannibalope Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I needed this.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3 i think i did too
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Brilliant, touching!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
:glomp: That is... WONDERFUL. it is brilliance defined and wrapped up in words to make it shine and make one think.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are so sweet :heart:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student Writer
:glomp:
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UtopianWhisper Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gratitude is one of the first signs of humility... If humbleness is cultivated perhaps one day we can have absolute sincerity in our gratitude ;-)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
the one nice thing about this being so bluntly honest is that it was as sincere as i could get, haha.
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nikikt Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I just so needed to read this. This is spectacular. Please tell me when you publish your first book and where to get it! You just took my broken heart and put a few pieces back together. Thank you so much and thank god for people like you <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh goodness, i am so glad to hear that :heart: thank you so much for all your support
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diddlyhohum Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow this is very beautiful. i love this. some of your images are just so fresh and wonderful. it's really nice to see something different. thanks for taking the time to read what i wrote :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
absolutely, i adored yours and the way you wrote it. thank you :heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love this.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3 you are too lovely
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank god for you and your writing.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh :blush: you're far too lovely
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SirLorcan Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
I totally agree with this statement!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Nevarware Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Magnificent. Would you like some criticism? Because I was gripped until the 5th stanza, then it lost me. I'm not entirely sure why, but I'll have a think about it and see if I can pinpoint it.

The brackets on the 6th stanza are definitely a very hard switch from metaphorical to literal, which may have been intended, but it feels like you're trying to establish a flow in the poem, and that sudden jolt throws it a bit.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i see what you mean. it's not a clear transition into the brackets. i'll play around with it. thank you :heart:
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Nevarware Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
You're welcome. :3
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AmarantineDream Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
'Thank God for people
who write the words bleeding in my heart
without knowing I exist'

you're one of those people for me with this poem. It's so beautifully written - I love the flow and the occasional rhymes that just seem to happen by accident. I can relate to almost every verse.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're the sweetest :love: thank you so much!
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
aahhh, this is so amazing. i'm in awe. this entire series thing really. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's so lovely and honest, i absolutely adore it. and thank you :heart:
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half-pixieman Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
What a freaking amazing poem. You know when you drink something in? I just did that, I just absorbed that whole thing. I love this so much.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my god, i can't tell you how much that means to me :love: thank you!
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Summonaconjurer Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
I, too, have been birthed old... this poem helps (Y).
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