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today is a six-word story:
I’m tired of waking up
dead.

soon,
I will peel back your
every insecurity and anxiety
and watch them fall to the floor
like vodka petals, regurgitated mosaics,

soon,
I will see you naked and
reborn and you will break apart
into passive aggressive poetic
dedications and unsent letters and
sour breaths,

soon,
I will hate and love you
for the very same reasons and

then,
I will move on.
experimental: a realistic love poem
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flummo Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student Writer
"I will see you naked and 
reborn and you will break apart
into passive aggressive poetic 
dedications and unsent letters and
sour breaths"


your experimental is gorgeous and inspiring.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: you're lovely
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Lawlessness45 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Expresses how so many romances play out. Excellent job capturing life within this poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It only goes on for so long - eventually, something much more pure comes along and reality takes a backseat. :heart: I always bear reality in mind, though
and I always love truth (and you).
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It is my continuing pleasure :bow:
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MetaruKitsune Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello!
Your absolutely amazing poem has been featured here -> kuriakyuuketsuki.deviantart.co…
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're so wonderful! <3 i can't wait to see the other works featured
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MetaruKitsune Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're more wonderful! :heart:
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