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This is a poem for all the people who still
have something to see in me. I could
cut myself on the sharp edge of my thoughts,

bleed out a saturated river of
something sweet; I could be like a million
other gifts from mother nature to preserve

in glass cases and scientific journals and
buzz words, to picket and fight over and
eventually forget. I could

write a million stories about the universe
in my stomach, and my lack of
a gag reflex and the irony in that.

I could write about the blooming storms
in my head and about how I’m addicted
to bad weather, and how I can’t hear myself

over the static waves rocking me to sleep.

My best friend is the most beautiful hurricane
I’ve ever seen, slow motion wreckage who says things like

what does it even mean, where are
we going, maddie, what am I even here for;

My first love wasn’t special. It was

ignorant and narcissistic and orbited around me
like some neglected planet, like I
was finally the center of a universe

besides my own, and that was enough.

Now, now is the season of metamorphosis
and I am measured by the bruises down my throat
and items on my bucketlist.

Now, now when I say I miss you,
you can know I never really meant it
at all.
because hey all auto biographies should be taken with a grain of salt
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You, my dear, are so wonderfully honest.
I love that in your writing more than you can imagine. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The only thing I really know how to write about is myself. Thank you!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well it makes for the best poetry, for sure.
My absolute pleasure. And I've missed ya, Ms. Maddie. :tighthug:
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TalaCatori Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I could say so much about this, because even though this is about you, I see myself in so many of these lines.

"Now, now is the season of metamorphosis
and I am measured by the bruises down my throat
and items on my bucketlist."

This is beautiful! Thank you so much for sharing you works!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm always honored to know anyone relates to my work. Thank you!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love that I can get lost in the imagery in this no matter how many times I read through it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you so much
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MrYoursTruly Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is really well done!
I don't think it means much coming from a noob, but I genuinely enjoyed it!
Have a great day. -That sounds like I only want you to have one good day and then horrible other days...-Er...Have a good life! That sounds like I won't greet you again, because I surely am! I'm going to view these works of yours. So, um...Have a good -insert period of time.-

-Aspiring noob, MrYoursTruly
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahaha, this is such a lovely comment. Thank you very much for your feedback and kind sentiments.
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I enjoy the sense of distance mixed with the bodiness, kind of makes me think of Catullus' poetry. Nothing more awesome than when pieces own their own feelings.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm absolutely honored to hear that :love: that's my favorite kind of poetry, thank you
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student Writer
This is gorgeous.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no you are :huggle:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: No, you are.
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flummo Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student Writer
I'll remember you.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I sure hope so <3
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AngelOfPain2007 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My first love wasn’t special. It was

ignorant and narcissistic and orbited around me
like some neglected planet, like I 
was finally the center of a universe

Gorgeous.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahh :love: thank you
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully done. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :love:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure, as always. <3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Student Writer
From the first word to the last, your poems capture me :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome :)
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
honestly, i think there are some lines that need to be cut. the beginning almost lost me. it's a bit cliche. but once i got past that, there are some really gorgeous lines, and overall, this is fantastic. ~fake-theory already pointed out my favorite line.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I agree. I was having a really rough time with the opening stanzas. If you have any suggestions, I'm open; if not, I'll probably tweak around with it on my own. Thank you :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
i am currently low on the writing mojo but when i'm back on my game i'll throw some suggestions your way.
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snowjoe72 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
I never really understood the expression "taken with a grain of salt"... what does that even mean? :confused:

(sorry for using the comment to ask a random question...)
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snowjoe72 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
Okay, thanks. :)
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Holy jeez.
This poem captured me immediately, from the very first line, and held me all the way through. The only place I tripped up is between "what am I even here for" and "My first love wasn't special," which doesn't transition all that well - or at least, it doesn't transition as fluidly, as perfectly, as every other sequence. (I particularly love 'I am addicted to bad weather' segueing into 'My best friend is the most beautiful hurricane,' it's a phenomenal juxtaposition.) And the last bit cycles back to the utter heartbreak of the beginning. <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ah, I see what you mean about the transition. I've been listening to a lot of spoken word lately so I had that flow in my head throughout, although I don't think it translated the same to paper. Thank you so much for all your feedback <3
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My pleasure, as always. <3
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is very beautiful. You write perfectly as always :star:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: thank you
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't really know how to describe it but there's just something so enigmatic yet so simple in the piece. It's quite emotional but yet calm and contemplative. 

That aside, you have lovely and languish language as usual :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear it, that was my mindset as I'd set out to write it. Thank you :heart:
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Summonaconjurer Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
there are too many lines from this I could quote and tell you I adore, but my favourite: 

'write a million stories about the universe
in my stomach, and my lack of 
a gag reflex and the irony in that.'

The way you link it up with the end as well... daaaayyum
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're sweet :heart: this means a lot to me, thank you
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Summonaconjurer Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013
you're welcome... keep up the sweet art =D
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hgfdsasdfgh Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh, I've said it before, but I just ADORE your metaphors. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you!
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hgfdsasdfgh Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Of course! :la:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You have a lovely, large brain... I enjoy this.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome miss ^.^
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013   Writer
or a lump
of sugar?
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i guess it depends who i'm forcefeeding haha
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fake-theory Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
My first love wasn’t special. It was

ignorant and narcissistic and orbited around me
like some neglected planet
so perfect <3
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