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and i guess i should have said i drilled this
cavity through my chest for you; you hid
in my mouth instead. there will always be you
holding my hand protecting me from
monsters in the dark worse than the ones
inside of us. goodbye

is not a word. it is the way
you will not meet my eyes when i
tiptoe back through eggshells and phantom
heartbeats. i guess i should have said
i don’t know the labyrinth of myself. i
should have mentioned the pinpricks
on my skin where you injected
yourself like a vaccination.  i should
have told you that your eyes remind me
of a watercolor sunset and your hands
are anchors and you are always warm
and i am tired of shivering. i should have
warned you that i’ve never loved anyone
as much as a prescription. i should
have held you closer to me, i should
have held your pieces tighter, i should

have carved a bigger hole.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner May 19, 2014   General Artist
and again :iconsquishhugplz: :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so painful because I know the general vicinity it comes from. Well written. Congrats on your feature, dear.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
sorry this is a late response; but thank you so much <3
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're so welcome. <3
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLR (Daily Literature Recognition) in a news article that can be found here. Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
it's an honor; thank you
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Great movement and word choices.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
High-five! 
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VertigoArt Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Professional Writer
This is written beautifully. Your use of punctuation and line breaks bring the piece together. If flows like tears at a funeral.

Words are supposed to move me and this moved part of me: my eyes to the top to read it again.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i'm so honored to hear that, thank you!
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inufufujesukristi Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow!!!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Your every word, even when it brings me to tears, is just so, well, wonderful to read.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
My pleasure!
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Perfling Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student General Artist
goodbye

is not a word. it is the way
you will not meet my eyes

Love that so much. Love the whole damn thing.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you!
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
I always feel the need to offer you an electronic hug after reading your writing.

"i should have/ warned you that I've never loved anyone/ as much as a prescription"

yeah, I think that would be why. :hug:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much, it helps :hug:
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
you are the perfect soul wrenching night read.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
best compliment ever
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liveartaslifeart Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
:/
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
x
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remeron-nap Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
dayum
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
tell it
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