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ENGLISH LANGUAGE by lombregrise

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a few years back you drowned
yourself nightly, face-down
and bloated, infatuated
with the moon's pearly depressions.

in darkness, I’d remembered you as
the theoretical portrait you used
to define death to different
philosophers. but now, a long

and simple time exceeds your careful
skin, your embryonic forms bruising
beneath quietudes where i had promised
you absolution and developed things,

and you kept still like a planet.
the letters you wrote from loved to lonely
were there when you peeled back my teachings,
because the skin beneath my thoughts

was your one taste of honest stillness
without newspaper words calling themselves
over, heady and apologetic, like lineal
beauties mating with the ambience.

you prophesized your own downfall
and romanticized it, noting only
the longevity of the paper doll people with
champagne sincerities frothing from their lips,

instead of the muffled pulse they carried
in weakness. and when you scar,
not beautifully, you will begin
to honor the treasure of waking up.
a collab with one of my biggest inspirations *v-espertine

go tell him you love him and he's wonderful
pre-sublimationa few years back you drowned
yourself nightly, face-down
and bloated, infatuated
with the moon's pearly depressions.

in darkness, I’d remembered you as
the theoretical portrait you used
to define death to different
philosophers. but now, a long

and simple time exceeds your careful
skin, your embryonic forms bruising
beneath quietudes where i had promised
you absolution and developed things,

and you kept still like a planet.
the letters you wrote from loved to lonely
were there when you peeled back my teachings,
because the skin beneath my thoughts

was your one taste of honest stillness
without newspaper words calling themselves
decomposing by the space in your stepswhat we did before you
blacked out: re-took the polaroids
you sold for pseudo-

spiritual paroxysm. licked pearls
off the gums of strangers—
i mean, you too had been

mining asteroids for lithium,
with cresting emotions settling in
your stomach. alcoholism

makes you salt intergalactic
carnage, it makes you float
belly-up over your own bloodlust.

all alone, you were digging
your elbows into a dark corner
of the room, looking

to knock out light, drinking
out loud and thinking
about smoking. and now you have

to change your shirt. i dragged
you outside the club where someone
claimed you were the bouquet

of roses trapped inside
his
reasons why my hands are shakinghow close i came to this, becoming
poison for bronzed models, monotone and efflorescent

and how much longer shall she be able to
inhabit the divine with eyes like lunar landings

turned in her fifteen-year-old
drug dealer and now she misses pyrotechnics

being handwritten and feminine, i would
express myself by inking runes across my forearms

dear cassandra, no blonde angels
read your poems so why don't you call me

and we can we sleep on floors
and paint in dust, a pair of drunken boats

every time you mention graduate school
acceptance rates, you kill the holographic universe

she has lived in los angeles her
twenty-one years, so she'
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FierySpark Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This piece is amazing Onion Boy 7
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're too sweet! :heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow :lmao: you and your cohort write amazingly well.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You should have mind-babies and then breed them with other great minds - sublimate the world with your prowess, Maddie.
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love how you carried the extended metaphor all the way--Beautiful piece.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3 my collab partner was amazing
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013
"you prophesized your own downfall
and romanticized it, noting only
the longevity of the paper doll people with
champagne sincerities frothing from their lips,"

gah! Just brilliant. Loved this poem. champagne sincerities...  Yes. just yes.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
honored to know you think so! :heart: thank you
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You two write very well together. I suspect to see more soon. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! rodhlann is fantastic
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
He had a fine partner, too. ;)
You're welcome, of course.
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randomphilosopher Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013   General Artist
WOW. I feel like you could teach a world to honor waking up with this beautiful poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh gosh thank you :heart: most of the credit goes to rodhlann haha
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Student Writer
:wow: Wonderful.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Student Writer
You are welcome. :heart:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hOLY SHIT STOP WITH THE GORGEOUS WRITING THAT HURTS MY SOUL
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sorrynotsorry

(thank youuu :huggle:)
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
lovely poem.  you two write well together.  :clap: :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! <3
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013
you're welcome.  my pleasure! :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
really harmonized well in this. written by one, it seems.

great and interesting lines throughout.

well done you two :thumbsup:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
he's a lovely collab partner! :la: thank you!
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nikikt Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
AonfijeanrjsdjnAPSRNDKMSNIDJNFEIJRNIC IM JUST GONNA DIE NOW. 8|

Your poems are too lovely and intricate and just gah- WOMAN. I CAN'T EVEN. DESCRIBE.

I wish I had ways as beautiful as yours to tell you how much you confuse and intrigue me at the same time with these beautiful poems. I'm checking v-espertine out!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh stop too much kindness :faint: thank you so so much, and i'm glad to hear you're checking him out, he's simply the best :heart:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student Writer
That's beautiful. That's just plain beautiful :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student Writer
My pleasure :)
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013   Writer
quite a nice dance here.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i had the best partner <3 thank you
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hgfdsasdfgh Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student General Artist
All of your works have a beautiful feeling to them, like a dream. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you so much, that compliment makes me so happy
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hgfdsasdfgh Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student General Artist
You're very welcome. :)
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v-espertine Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
:love:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: you're wonderful
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