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I am
  shaking ligaments,
       tender machinations,
   unrealistic ideologies of an
arbitrary                              cynicist.

     [gaps between
  human sympathy
are toxic; breathing
is a chore. there is
 a careful warmth in the
    combined effort of
      necessity's unwanted
       side effects.]

we are the forgotten.
we are the tangled limbs
and childhood stories for
a more sensitive future; we
are the longing, we are
the limitless.

    we are measured
  in the people we touch;
and I will love you
     in the UV light of
                            hide and seek paranoia.
       I love you in the red shimmer
     of harbored dreams, I love you
in the industrial glow
             of sleeping giants.
                      I love you
                             in the dark
                      when you do not see the
hurt staining my skin, the
             heavy sorrow pooling
                         in my eyes, the shaking
             in my fingers they couldn’t
diagnose.
so i think i stopped writing poems and just started cataloging my life
yip yip yippee
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Invisiperson Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have no words for how amazing that was. Very well done c:
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014   Writer
you are a fucking poetic goddess. i hope you look at yourself in the mirror,
i hope you study your hands while you're making tea, i hope you cry so hard you feel it on your tongue,
and i hope you flip through your poetry and feel so, so beautiful. i hope you see. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i need to remind myself because i've been feeling really fucking run of the mill lately and i'm scared to write because i'm worried about what won't come out
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
"We are measured in the people we touch;" Truer words ne'er spoken. This is lovely. The first part was a little choppy for me, but at the line "We are the forgotten" You pulled me in, and never let go. So wonderfully done. gah. when are you publishing a book of these? I'd like to pre-order a copy. :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh my goodness :love: thank you so much
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shep4life Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
These are an amazing choice of words!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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shep4life Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome!
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kilkegard Featured By Owner May 3, 2014
I liked the escalation of the "I love you..." refrains at the end.  The "I love you in the dark..." felt particularly poignant.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i really was hoping it would. thank you!
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tagatitig Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Reading your works always give me goosebumps and the tiniest little ache in my chest that doesn't go away hours, even days after. Your words are pure feeling, madame, and I am grateful for the chance to read them over and over again. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much for that :heart:
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the bracketed section, and the mentions of red shimmer and industrial giants. I love how this feels poisonous and passionate and sad all at once. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much, and thank you for understanding it so well
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VengefulFawn11 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you make so many parts of reality sound so beautiful good job you deserve an award
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
aw, thank you :love:
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting way you have with the words here, I especially like the last lines
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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:iconpereyga:
Pereyga Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :)
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Serendiipitii Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Cataloging your life, hmm? Love it so far ..
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh thank goodness, i'm glad
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my gosh every singly poem you write is just... You just ooze incredible poetry! Love 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're too sweet :blush:
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw! Love 
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remeron-nap Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
i feel the word 'unlovliest' doesn't flow well but other than that i like this
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
changed it to "unwanted"
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remeron-nap Featured By Owner May 4, 2014
that definitely works a lot better.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for the feedback. i like it stylistically but i see what you mean. i'll sit on it for a day or so and come back.
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butter-holiday Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
You have such a way with words. This is wonderful :)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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