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above half-hearted streetlights and industrial flooding
and vague misinterpretations, I cut
a little too deep.


it always comes to this; hungry shivers,
dry voices, heavy breaths as your eyes
fixate upon a set point in the distance
which you label as happiness, a nirvana
in plain view but too far

for your rubber legs to take you there.

back then we were theorists developing
a new frontier; we were two dreamers,
two corpses on a collision course in
the desperate season. you warned me
there weren’t enough words to say
beautiful; as it turns out, we
were a slip of the tongue.


I woke this morning
a butterfly. you would like
the sun pouring through my wings and
the feathers collecting
at the foot of my bed.
"i don't know what this is and neither will you"
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BookWormMK Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's been a long time since I read a poem I could feel in my stomach. Thank you for this one.
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flummo Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can imagine this being read aloud.
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intricately-ordinary Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I should start reading poetry again
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flummo Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
please do :la:
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Lawlessness45 Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"fixate upon a set point in the distance
which you label as happiness, a nirvana
in plain view but too far"

this struck me as terribly truthful. Always seeking somewhere else, thinking it will lead to happiness...but, once we've reached it, finding it is farther away then we thought...or perhaps it moves, and we chase  after it...like a child trying to recapture a lost balloon. 

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intricately-ordinary Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i think that's a perfect metaphor :heart:
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Lawlessness45 Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your poetry just seems to inspire me. I actually just posted a poem using that line. And credited you for the inspiration. If you want to read it here it is. lawlessness45.deviantart.com/a… Sorry if the link doesn't work. I'm still figuring deviant art out. :) But at any rate, thanks for the inspiration.
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intricately-ordinary Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aww, you're lovely! :heart: it's wonderful
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Lawlessness45 Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That you for your inspiration! :)
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DogmaticKerr Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my, the things that came to mind :faint: :heart:
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