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if I could

I’d love you like
those couples who grow
into each other and make
poetry out of body language
and wear one another’s
weaknesses when they get
too heavy and talk about
the weather without ever really
meaning the weather at all;
and you’d keep me from
falling asleep in the ocean
and I’d lie about little
things, always confusing
Sunday for Tuesday and
you for somebody with
the same face who
was always afraid of
me. you’d chuckle and
hold me and I’d cave in to
you like the hungry tide
and you’d say I looked
beautiful when I cried
and I wouldn’t believe you
but I’d cry more anyways.

if people were alive,
you’d be the brightest
one. I don’t have much
to offer but I could write you
a million dedications
in the sand, and give you
pocket change when you
needed a wish; I could
take you to New Zealand
to paint water lilies or England
to go skydiving or Italy
to fall in love and mean it
and I would promise you
the moon and take you to visit
on a night when it looks
beautiful and open and
safe.

people like me weren’t
cut out for this, I spend
most of my time trying to
forget who I am. today,
I decided to defy the theory
of progress and reimagine
the psychology of reoccurring
dreams. I’m already sorry for
the ways I’d care about you
if you let me,

but I just want to talk to you
about the weather and
the storm gathering inside
of me.
and we'd rename the stars as people we used to know
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JWA2277 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting
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JustReese Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student Writer
"people like me weren't cut out for this, I spend most of my time trying to forget who I am."

this poem is amazingly worded and relatable
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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Renkai141 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I faved this along time ago but I din't coment, so I came here again to say i love this and it brings out how I feel about a certain someone. I hope you keep writing more.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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Renkai141 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
hearts<3
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zaparagrl Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow i love this. and my boyfriend thought i was good at poetry. this makes me feel like an amateur! Really really good. and i like ur user name too by the way it actually fits this poem pretty well.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the stream of consciousness flow, just beautiful
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You write the most heart-filled things, Maddie. :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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janardana Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There is so much about this that is beautiful, I don't even know where to begin.  I love the idea of 'the storm gathering inside me'; the eventual (perhaps very literal) watershed moment that's cyclically being built up to.  Just delightfully written.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank youuu
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013   Writer
"people like me weren’t 
cut out for this, I spend
most of my time trying to
forget who I am. today,
I decided to defy the theory
of progress and reimagine
the psychology of reoccurring 
dreams. I’m already sorry for 
the ways I’d care about you
if you let me"

 gorgeous :heart: 
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you are <2
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AJ-Dion Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Damn you're good.  Love this.  :D (Big Grin)
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
you ache so beautifully, maddie. there are not enough words in all the languages to even begin to exhaust all the reasons why we should love, nor should we want to exhaust them. but you've definitely captured some of that vulnerability and tenderness that is so prevailing in the strangely shaped hearts we were given.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so so much <3
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HelenBurg Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful piece<3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Vermilionnight Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
very nice
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Vermilionnight Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014
how are you?
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Angiepureheart Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
it hurts...i can feel it..
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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WrittenInRaw Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student Writer
I wish we could like comments on here...
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:iconjohntanner:
JohnTanner Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Professional General Artist
Tanner is Love.
Tanner is Life.

Keep dreaming of Tanner. Your Life is Saved.
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iLov3-Pokii Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconcryforeverplz: This is so Beautiful
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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SupremeGnomeRuler Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ohmygodthisissogood.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Partner-in-crime Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Such a beautiful piece <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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AdrianMinotaur Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You've got a powerful voice, a tortured soul, and it's so beautiful when it all comes out...If you haven't already I hope you find the one who completes you, who keeps you from drowning in the ocean, and rides with you on the tides...You deserve a wonderful life! :) Your poems are so potent, so powerful they seem to move earth and heaven...and just so easily...my heart...:)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're too kind to me <3
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
How the hell do you know exactly how I'm feeling about people and write a beautiful poem with amazing imagery EVERY DAMN TIME?! Seriously though, this poem has blown me away, and if I ever forget how to write, or if I ever wrote at all, I would want someone to show this to me and say" This is what a poem is."
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're too lovely
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PearlT Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Love this.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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WaitingToBeFree Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student General Artist
beautiful, as alwaysHug
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Lady-Weavile-461 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconlainloveplz:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Lady-Weavile-461 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:tighthug:
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ThePAGrandGorgeChick Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Professional Photographer
Holy shit this is so dead on it's scary. Really the way you word it seems so pleasent but the reality of it comes across so clearly. I absolutely love it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"but I just want to talk to you
about the weather and 
the storm gathering inside
of me."

gorgeousss
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
youuuuu
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zaparagrl Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow i totally get where u r coming from but would never have found the words to say it so perfectly.
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