Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
you,
beautiful siren girl with melodies
entangled in her hair: you are
shell-shocked and sea-struck
even though you cannot stand
the sensation of sand beneath
your toes.

you have fingers for prying, picking,
pulling at your skin and nesting
in that hollow space between
your bones. and if anyone asks,
you will swear there are monsters
sleeping in the concaves of your ribs;
there are ghosts beneath your tongue,
embittered, and you are not the words
you speak.

they say there is an answer, little girl
(sometimes you begin to believe you are
a scarecrow on the border of reality
begging people to turn the other way;
and the mirror will agree)

how far have you gone? a feather in
the breeze who won’t promise to return
again; there is a wandering warmth in
the hesitation of your harbored fear.

where will you be in six months when
the future has become itself and you
are still astray? little one, no one is like you

in the way you sway to the cadence of a
dissonant night. no one knows your smile,
no one knows why you don’t see beauty
in the eyes you swear look watered down
and quieting; my love

sometimes people do not lie

sometimes you really are the translucent
angel you pray upon in dreams; there will be
days where you will forget to breathe, but
my dear, I love you,
and that is all you need.
This is for #PoeticalCondition’s Love Letter to Yourself contest. I know I am coming in a little late, hehe (It ends tonight). I really wanted to join, more for the prompt than anything else, though. This poem and idea has been a long time coming. But, here it is, finally:

I love me.

edit: I placed! [link]
Add a Comment:
 
:iconchaoticinversions:
ChaoticinversioNs Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2014
<3 <3 <3
Reply
:iconthypoetsorcerer:
ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your deftness at using conceits is a privilege to behold. It's not surprise your piece was chosen among the winners.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are so sweet <3
Reply
:iconsirlorcan:
SirLorcan Featured By Owner May 26, 2013
Just... Incredibly beautiful!
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :heart:
Reply
:iconsirlorcan:
SirLorcan Featured By Owner May 26, 2013
You're welcome.
Reply
:iconavolatilecalm:
AVolatileCalm Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
incredible. great close.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :love:
Reply
:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
( A apologize for the late response! )
Congratulations on winning third place!
You have been featured in my journal: [link]
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
Reply
:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Student Writer
A little late, but, congratulations on placing in the contest! :heart: though I still think you shoulda won :giggle: :huggle:
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
awww thank you so much beautiful :tighthug:
Reply
:iconprettyflour:
prettyflour Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations! You have been featured in my journal!


[link]
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :heart:
Reply
:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on your placement in #PoeticalCondition's contest!

I llama you :giggle:
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
Reply
:iconspidermilkshake:
SpiderMilkshake Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Professional General Artist
Oh, this is loveness.

Congratulations on the win, by the way. :D
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ohhh thank you :love:
Reply
:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's such a grand thing to be aware of yourself.
That's something that's gonna serve you well. :heart:
Lovely work, as usual. (:
Reply
:iconthomasintheclouds:
ThomasInTheClouds Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student Writer
I love everything about this…
I wish I could drown myself in your words.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my goodness :love: thank you so much!
Reply
:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student Writer
(and I love that title)
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(well thank you :D your comments made me giggle this morning)
Reply
:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student Writer
Oh, goodness, how embarrassing, the first thing I quoted was from a different poem... I swear I thought I copy-pasted this:

"and if anyone asks,
you will swear there are monsters
sleeping in the concaves of your ribs;
there are ghosts beneath your tongue,
embittered, and you are not the words
you speak."


Agh, I should really preview my comments before I post. :|
Reply
:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student Writer
"this year, the summer sun
is shining stronger than any other
year i can remember."

"where will you be in six months when
the future has become itself and you
are still astray? little one, no one is like you"

"there will be
days where you will forget to breathe, but
my dear, I love you,
and that is all you need."


Oh this this this this is incredible. Haven't read much of the other entries, but heck, I want you to win. :heart: wasn't able to scrape up a piece of my own in time for the deadline, but I'm saving it as a future prompt, for when I'm ready to look at myself.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh gosh, you are so lovely gahh :heart: thank you! There were so many wonderful entries! I was happy just to participate for the prompt! :la: which I definitely want to see you writing, dear. There's so much about you to love :)
Reply
:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Student Writer
We'll just have to wait and see, then, but I'm betting on you. :D

And oh, you. :huggle:
Reply
:iconintrasect:
IntraSect Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
Resting in the safety and warmth with whom it was entrusted, her heart spoke, "Thank you. Everything will be okay so long as I am with her."
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
and I can finally believe that :heart:
Reply
:iconintrasect:
IntraSect Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013
:)
You can see your own light.

Answers to prayer may make it blinding.
I am morally obligated to recommend you purchase shades.
Reply
:iconpastmisfortunes:
PastMisfortunes Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I think I kinda figured out it was you you were speaking of in the last three stanzas (which made it somewhat less confusing). But...wow. This has got to be one of my absolute favorites so far.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's difficult to write a love letter to yourself, I found out :D and thank you so much :love:
Reply
:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...I should do this. God knows I need something like this.

You are beautiful.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you definitelydefinitelydefinitely x 32549283785 should. I would adore reading it <3

and goodness, thank you so much ;u;
Reply
:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If I do, it may not be for awhile, as I have my hands full with other things...but I really think I should.

You're very welcome!
Reply
:iconautumnlit:
autumnlit Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
OH! :heart: This is beautiful. I like seeing you say you love you. I love you too. ^^ Just wanted to let you know. I've have not been able to do as much reading on da lately, but I'm so very happy I got to read this tonight. :heart:
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my dear, you are far too sweet :tighthug: Thank you for such kind words. I love you, too; you are one of the warmest and loveliest people I have had the pleasure of meeting.
Reply
:iconautumnlit:
autumnlit Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
:iconaawplz:
Reply
:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
and there are many reasons to love you.

and there are many beautiful facets to your writing;
I believe, the sincerity with which you express emotions
is shining most brilliantly in this one.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh gosh ;u; you are too wonderful a person. sdaljadhdljljgjlaks I wish I had more words to tell you how much you meant to me but you've stunned them all away, again :hug:
Reply
:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aw, just being honest.

I'm hardly more than a witness of beautiful things.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
and a beautiful thing, yourself <3
Reply
:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconohstopitplz:
Reply
:iconmozartsnemesis:
MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
awww. this is so sweet and real. I love it.

"little one, no one is like you

in the way you sway to the cadence of a
dissonant night."

you always find a way of saying things that makes me go "oh yea, that's how one puts into words what they feel." just beautiful.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's so hard for me to put things into words without feeling entirely cliched :noes: but thank you so very very much :tighthug:
Reply
:iconcontradictory55:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Student Writer
And that is wonderful. It really is all one needs because if you love yourself, even if you're alone, that is okay because love is like an acknowledgement of worth and nobody can take that worth away.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are very wise for someone so young :huggle:
Reply
:iconcontradictory55:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Student Writer
Wisdom doesn't necessarily come with age =) :huggle:
Reply
:iconsnowjoe72:
snowjoe72 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
I think this may be one of your best poems yet. because it has to do with loving yourself. No one is perfect, no one can ever become perfect. Perfection is nothing but an absurd idea dreamed up by people who, at that moment, are lacking in imagination. This is not a bad thing though. Because think about it....... If you were to become perfect, everything in life would seem meaningless and you would have wasted most of it getting to this point of no return. Enjoy the here, the now, the you that only you can be, the you that you want to be, and of course, just be yourself. love yourself for who you are. You are the one who decides your fate or denies it. You shape your life with your choices, your actions, and your words. Take it from the guy who knows from experience. Knowledge is power, but power is worth absolutely NOTHING if you cannot find a way to use it that pleases you. A Spirit bomb is worth NOTHING if it doesn't hit it's target. And all that time charging it would have been for nothing, as would be the life energy it contained. This may just be a DBZ reference, but does that fact make it any less relevant or true? I would like to think of it simply as a creative alternative to words of wisdom. Who says anime can teach you nothing? Not the people who have the imagination to enjoy it for sure! This poem is wonderfully written and it deserves much respect for its own worth as well as the worth of its moral. that moral is obviously what you said: "I love me.". After all, your poetry is like a siren's song itself. It lures in the interest of many people despite the darkness it contains. Darkness is not a bad thing. It is simply the alternative to light. And I know how hard it can be to stick to the light side of life..... :nod:
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear that. Thank you very much.
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconintricately-ordinary: More from intricately-ordinary


Featured in Collections

Literature by SomethingOnceSacred

Poetry by earthian101

Words by Shoeborn


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
February 28, 2013
File Size
1.6 KB
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
1,458
Favourites
82 (who?)
Comments
51
×