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the sky whispers,
ribbons of crystalline quiet,
same shade as the angel dust
you shivered every time we were
alone.

in the darkness, we were
sorry birds searching for
open dawns. you, the
swan, me, the
raven,
black as night and
just as hopeful.

and there were poems
written in your skin, universes
blooming in your hands; your eyes
were a December sunrise saving me
from any sleep.

I’ve decided that
people are a composition of
all their greatest memories—and you,
you were always the most
beautiful piece of
me.
I miss you
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The images in this are quietly beautiful. Birds and dawn and crystalline quiet skies. Also, angel dust is the prettiest phrase. Colloquial terms for drugs are not usually so poetic.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
to be honest, I totally forgot angel dust was slang for drugs. I guess it adds a new layer to this poem. Thank you so much <3
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, wow! Happy coincidence?
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"I’ve decided that
people are a composition of
all their greatest memories—and you,
you were always the most
beautiful piece of
me."

Oh my god, yes. Yes, yes, yes.

:iconthisplz:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ohmygosh i know, that was the most honest part of the dedication
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconmuzykluvr:
Muzykluvr Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
This is so beautiful : ) You are amazing with words ; )
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! <3
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner May 24, 2013
gorgeous and clever :)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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tiajones Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that last . . half of the poem?
absolutely wonderful.

it reminds me of a friend i used to have.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you
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tiajones Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
of course <3
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Gonad-The-Destroyer Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're insanely good at bringing tears to my eyes. Gorgeous as always.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
goodness, thank you so much :huggle:
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Student Writer
This is one of my all time favorites, I'm proud to see how your writing has changed over time. As for me I have to get my butt back to it because I've been nothing but stalling. Seriously though Maddie, this poem blew me away.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm honored to hear that, good luck with your writing :heart:
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Student Writer
To you as well :) :heart:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
in the darkness, we were
sorry birds searching for
open dawns. you, the
swan, me, the
raven,
black as night and
just as hopeful.

and there were poems
written in your skin, universes
blooming in your hands; your eyes
were a December sunrise saving me
from any sleep.


That is every dose of beautiful! :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you so much!
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randomphilosopher Featured By Owner May 21, 2013   General Artist
Um, wow.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're too nice :faint:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
in the darkness, we were
sorry birds searching for
open dawns. you, the
swan, me, the
raven,
black as night and
just as hopeful.


Gorgeous, love. :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: just like you
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Youuuuuuu...my goodness. :heart:
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Infractusgrace Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Student Writer
Really pretty :-)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Student Writer
Ah, I love it when you post a new poem. They always entrance me. :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
your comments always make my day :love:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Student Writer
Your writing always make mine. :love:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
;u; oh goodness you are too kind
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Student Writer
awwwww. You're too awesome. :heart:

That's like the 20th time someone has said that to me today.....
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Moonlightequilibrium Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I want to say you're precocious, but I also think you're somewhat of an "old soul."
What I'm trying to say is that you're exceedingly amazing and it's almost unbelievable.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I thought the same about you when I first read your work. And to be honest, I'm not quite sure how to respond to such beautiful words, thank you :heart:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Student Writer
From start to finish, all of your poems are just beautiful.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: you are so sweet
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Student Writer
I try to be :giggle:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Damn.

"you were always the most
beautiful piece of
me."

I bet that's true, since you made this amazing piece to go with it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
gah, thank you so much :tighthug:
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IntraSect Featured By Owner May 19, 2013
The allure of earthly treasure demands passage into tomb. The map to golden memories is no different.

Ghosts feed on spirit. Life is taken like water poured into mirage. Appeal is served, but none return.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's the journey that defines us
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IntraSect Featured By Owner May 19, 2013
Past tombs unsealed reveal dead value.

Unwrap your present.
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Student General Artist
"and there were poems
written in your skin"
ohh I love this.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :heart:
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Student General Artist
You're most welcome!
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
As beautiful and exquisite as ever, I see.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're too kind :rose:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Just as honest as ever, I promise! :heart:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Professional Writer
The last stanza :floating:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :love:
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