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she cannot recall all
the things she's
swallowed:
pretty pills, rancid
razor blades and
wasted words coat
her sorry throat

she can't count her
fingers, like she can't
count the days again--
it's zero to zero, in it
to spin it:
time is measured in
lengths of abandonment.

she comes home empty-
handed; defeated,
depleted, repeated:
"I gave up again
I gave up I gave it
away I gave up"
repeated like some
makeshift lullaby

and once more she
apologizes to a
broken window,
shattered, scattered,
just hoping to
know somewhere
better to go

and when she walks,
she holds hands
with the yellowed
skeleton of a
forgotten little girl--
on their tour of
the world. she
stops at the
edge and whispers
'there is a point of
no return' with
a guiding hand;
she sends her off
and realizes she's
only killed
herself
She cradles her puppet heart.
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PastMisfortunes Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That last stanza. My Lord, I love that part.

and when she walks,
she holds hands
with the yellowed
skeleton of a
forgotten little girl--


Read that and give yourself a pat on the back. You deserve it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are so kind :blush: thank you
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
Right in the feels.

I might cry now. Seriously, I'm not even being facetious. :wow:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
don't cry :noes: :huggle:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
B'aww! I'm okay now, your words are just so amazing. :heart::tighthug:
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featherback Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
time is measured in
lengths of abandonment.


How are you this incredible?
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I learn from youuuu :la:
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featherback Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Naww you gots all the natural talent! :la:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Student Writer
So many powerful lines in this piece, but I'd say these are my favourite:
time is measured in
lengths of abandonment.


:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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