Shop More Submit  Join Login
×

:iconintricately-ordinary: More from intricately-ordinary


Featured in Collections

writing by Hfeather53

Literature by SomethingOnceSacred

Literature by Quolia


More from deviantART



Details

Submitted on
January 18, 2013
File Size
1.1 KB
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
331
Favourites
32 (who?)
Comments
28
×
she cannot recall all
the things she's
swallowed:
pretty pills, rancid
razor blades and
wasted words coat
her sorry throat

she can't count her
fingers, like she can't
count the days again--
it's zero to zero, in it
to spin it:
time is measured in
lengths of abandonment.

she comes home empty-
handed; defeated,
depleted, repeated:
"I gave up again
I gave up I gave it
away I gave up"
repeated like some
makeshift lullaby

and once more she
apologizes to a
broken window,
shattered, scattered,
just hoping to
know somewhere
better to go

and when she walks,
she holds hands
with the yellowed
skeleton of a
forgotten little girl--
on their tour of
the world. she
stops at the
edge and whispers
'there is a point of
no return' with
a guiding hand;
she sends her off
and realizes she's
only killed
herself
She cradles her puppet heart.
Add a Comment:
 
:iconpastmisfortunes:
PastMisfortunes Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That last stanza. My Lord, I love that part.

and when she walks,
she holds hands
with the yellowed
skeleton of a
forgotten little girl--


Read that and give yourself a pat on the back. You deserve it.
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are so kind :blush: thank you
Reply
:iconzaquiastorm:
ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
Right in the feels.

I might cry now. Seriously, I'm not even being facetious. :wow:
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
don't cry :noes: :huggle:
Reply
:iconzaquiastorm:
ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
B'aww! I'm okay now, your words are just so amazing. :heart::tighthug:
Reply
:iconfeatherback:
featherback Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
time is measured in
lengths of abandonment.


How are you this incredible?
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I learn from youuuu :la:
Reply
:iconfeatherback:
featherback Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Naww you gots all the natural talent! :la:
Reply
:iconlaeneris:
Laeneris Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Student Writer
So many powerful lines in this piece, but I'd say these are my favourite:
time is measured in
lengths of abandonment.


:heart:
Reply
:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
Reply
Add a Comment: