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this is all
real, realer than I'd
like; my friends are ghosts
passing through the skeleton of me.
I am afraid of their words,
trailing from their lips
like wisps of smoke;
I have secondhand self-esteem
issues. and you,

you are more handsome now
than you ever were before
I was blinded by the
light. you hurt
like I do and in a world
of painkillers and
existential numbness that
is the fucking world, you hurt
like I do and you try
to shake it from your skin
like a shiver. you look at me
like I'm a natural disaster
and I guess I'm shivering, too, but
not for the same reason.

I don't know how to live
without wanting to die; you were
supposed to be the adventure
guiding me
through unfamiliar territory
but you left
and I
don't
feel
like I should.

I understand what it is
now to need someone. every
irregular heartbeat is a mini.eclipse
and I need that spark
so      badly;       I need you
to light me from
the inside like a lantern
because
this fear of the dark
was taught.

you make me relive
the days when I was so alive
they had to pull me
down
from the clouds with an anchor;
life was my song
but
no one
ever knew the right
words, please don't
bring that back to

me.
   let me die with this,
   that frown on your lips
   salt in your wounds--
      i don't like you

      the story repeats.



let's be real.
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014   General Artist
you are just too gorgeous
beyond your physical years
great as your gargantuan soul
god intended you to be beautiful
and make you out of cat-to-butterfly curiosity
to keep us enraptured
and keep you whole

all my love,
dee :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're too lovely to me :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014   General Artist
and you have been nothing but beautiful to me :heart:
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iLov3-Pokii Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That last paragraph has got to be the best thing I read this entire day ; u ;
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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:icondetoxingdeath:
DetoxingDeath Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
(That's how strong it is)
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:icondetoxingdeath:
DetoxingDeath Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
If I read too much if your stuff in one sitting I'm afraid I'd OD!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
haha, thank you so much
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MissesUnlucky Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh, I know this feeling. Maybe not exactly, but it's so relatable. Wonderfully written! This is so tragically beautiful!!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much!
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:iconmissesunlucky:
MissesUnlucky Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! X3
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:iconbritlawrence:
BritLawrence Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
completely broke me down
just want to give up Half-Hearted 
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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zoefletcher Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"I have secondhand self-esteem issues." I'll admit I read this bit over quite a few times just to enjoy the little shiver it gave me. <3 Beautiful as always!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're so sweet <3 thank you!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Student Writer
I don't think you could ever be anything not real. :tighthug:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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:iconcontradictory55:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Student Writer
:)
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014
To the clouds, with you. And don't fear losing that feeling so much that you avoid it. You are an author, through and through; write your own story.

and I'll be here to read it, amongst (deservedly) an ever increasing number of others.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
your comments always light up my day <3
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:iconnawkaman:
nawkaman Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
You deserve brighter days, and I am quite happy to do my part.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You had me at "wonderland."
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: :heart: This is amazing, hon. :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner May 16, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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InterrogateMe Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014   Writer
There's so much feeling in this, its very strong and powerful.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much
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calvincooledge Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
you should be a song writer, or that your poems would be pretty cool if someone were to sing them, but not with a sad tone.....um they only way i feel that i can explain it is if i give you an example - www.youtube.com/watch?v=3EAIPF… . also i wish i was as good at (or creative) at name/titling things as you are "stories from wonderland" *thumbs up*

Singing  
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! i'd love to be a song writer
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:iconcalvincooledge:
calvincooledge Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
:happybounce:  songs and poems , story aren't that much different if you take away the music form the lyrics then your left with words that make a poem or story. Its why I like music so much, but I only have the talent to listen....
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm a little bit crying from this, especially from the third stanza on, and I don't know why I keep trying to comment on your work but somehow I feel like I have to tell you how much I love your words. 
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you and i are birds of a feather
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:iconsycamoresea:
SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
as long as that means we can fly
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
always been my biggest dream :heart:
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ButterflyTorn Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014
I am left speechless. +fav Heart


The description mostly. Clap 
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
mhmm. Quite well written and honest. The title is especially strong after reading the whole poem. The ending has quite a sad feel to it as well and the over all work flows quite well.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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:iconnotensmsk:
NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome.
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:iconvallestin:
Vallestin Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Arg. My soul hurts
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
okay on the real I'm not sure if I dig the formatting in ".mi.ni..ec.lipse."
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
so much for stylistic adventures
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
sometimesitbelikedat
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