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morse code upon collarbones and
sun-bleached smiles. she
wasn't ready. she wasn't ready.

    he had open arms like
    the song about the london bridge;
    chlorine baptized him a new
    man. innocent, innocent,

what did you see
when you kissed her? the
pearls upon the waves, the
silence upon the shore. was it
quiet enough to hear
the break? thunderous blue, the
chasms of her eyes.
                                   I was
                              there. never
                          present, in the body
                     that doesn't fit, I watched
             you murder the sky. I wasn't ready
         I wasn't ready; I swallowed a dream and
                                         vomited blood and somehow
                                                                  I can't clean myself out.
                                                                  I can't brush the taste of me
                                                                  from my own mouth.
                                                                  I've become the constellations
                                                                  wrapped gently around my
                                                                  legs.
   it comes to this.
   she asks why are
   your hands shaking?
   I say it's a seasonal
   affliction
no joke about getting hit by the tandem bike though
sta.sh/0j4tpe2f6gm sta.sh/01lhy70dsope (still getting used to not being able to use thumbs because i'm not a premium member anymore)

things are difficult
people are difficult

also i'm so sorry none of my browsers are working and i can get on deviantart but i literally can not see any of my watch or feedback messages. i'm not trying to ignore anyone and not reply
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JWA2277 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
it is an interesting use of visual and written words. Something I am inspired to try.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014   General Artist
each of your writings contain the emotional equivalent of watching all the most beautiful indie/transgressive and classic romantic movies in one go.
it's like eternal sunshine meets a walk to remember and i'm dying here from all the feels, sweetheart, i really am.
but then, i guess there wouldn't be a lovelier way to pass, yes? :tighthug: :heart: :heart: :heart:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014
the most interesting thing to me about this poem was the "house divided" sketch you've created with your line placement and how that tied in so well with the poem. Maybe thats not what you were going for, but it's what I saw. as far as the content, it was superb as always. Wonderfully done. :)
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Student Writer
:tighthug: Wow. It's just... your every poem just captures me.
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sasori-the-dreamer Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014
Once again, you've blown me away with the way your words flow so perfectly. It's a true work of art!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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dreamingshadow Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014
It's just amazing how apt this is to how I currently feel.

Amazing ability with words as always.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014
Oh, Maddie.

You always manage to hit me square in the heart with your anvil-words. And I mean that in the best way possible. I'm not sure anyone's poetry on here so consistently rends emotion from a reader like yours does. You are like a soul-wick, drawing yearning and beauty out of everything you touch.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:blushes: you don't know how much that means to me. the fact i'm able to convey my experience to anyone else at all is the sole reason i started writing. thank you :heart:
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