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there aren’t enough moments
to love you, or words
in the English language to call you
beautiful. there aren’t enough
heartbeats in me to dedicate you
something you might deserve.

you can no longer lie.
a vengeful earthquake births itself inside
your unkind frame-- bones and skin and
muscle knotted together as an attempt
at something durable; but when you scream,
you don’t wake up. your world

collapses in mounting seconds. words
are a currency and you are
finally rich. you have lived
in the mouths of ghosts for so long
that you can walk through walls;
you aren’t here, you’re choking

on other planets from a lack of oxygen
and understanding. but I will love you,
I will love you; dear wallflower,
your petals are not wilted. dear
anonymous, I could give you a name.
dear hopeless, there are not enough words

in the English language for how beautiful
you really are.
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unravelledrose Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Loved the raw emotion in this. Beautiful honesty. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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chewyraezen Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
how gifted you are! this reaches deep into the soul. I feel empathy and wisdom.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that means so much! thank you!
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vespera Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
love love love the title!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Human nature at its finest. :)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :love:
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
No problem.
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Writer
Absolutely gorgeous piece, hun...it's truth--the wrenching kind, the one that hurts so much it seems to tear your insides...yet it's hope in its truest for, and love and compassion...so thanks, hun for giving people that which they may not be able to see within themselves.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much, that's all I could hope for with this piece :heart:
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student Writer
Well then, you definitely accomplished it. :hug:
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InterrogateMe Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013   Writer
This is beauty in it's truest form.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you so much!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my dear...I love this for being exactly what it is...a poem with such gorgeous images that they move your soul. :hug:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so touched to know it was able to move you :hug: thank you
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IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Omg this is beyond amazing :O
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, honored you think so!
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IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! Aw you're honored? :DDD
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student Writer
:love: That's lovely ^^
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is really resonated with me. 
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad to hear it <3
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Atanvaron Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student General Artist
I really didn't get it, the suicide note part, care to give a hint?


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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
people who are suicidal have a tendency to feel alone and unloved. the title was me spelling out the end result of the poem. it was also a reference to the other poem I linked.
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, you. :heart:

I cried. (There aren't any other words.)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh you had the same impact on me, love
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:love:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Professional Writer
:rose: - magnifique :rose:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013   Writer
my favorite piece by you.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013   Writer
:love:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Agghhh, stop being so awesome! You're forcing me to suggest your epic poetry! :lmao:

But in all seriousness, this is lovely, as well. Just........lovely. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: you're one to speak of loveliness
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconohstopityouplz: Lol, keep up the fantastic work, Maddie. <3
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're such a shining soul :heart: Your sincerity and warmth come through in droves of beating hearts :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you think too highly of me, thank you
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've considered this possibility and I'm not as sure that that is the case - in fact, I am quite sure that it is not the case! There is a lot that I do not know about you, this is true and there could a lot that I am assuming... but what I base my observations off of, mostly, are your... poems :D What you say in your comments & artist's comments and for all of your words, I would swear that you were my age and that you had gone through as much as me if not a little bit more. But the fact probably is that you're 6-10 years younger than me yet you have all the vision and perspective that I do, all the vocabulary that I do (and probably more) and a certain old-soul feeling to you that just leaves me flabbergasted. I've always felt that you are far from ordinary though you are, definitely, definitely intricate...

I could be wrong, but I'm not sure how I would be - for all the infatuation, all the adoration and all the headiness of wonder there are always these clear-sounding notes, these clarion facts that, I think, read right to the root of your being and make you the wonderful young woman that you are.

I know that you are more than I ever was, years and years ago and I think that you are going to be more than I ever could be...

and that's awesome ;D
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vergilusphoenix Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:') Lovely!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :heart:
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