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I'm sending all my words back
to the people who need them--
people who wear scars like
war trophies, like jewelry, like
an identification for those suffering
from the same acceptance of
self-hate. this is to the people
who sleep with one eye open, who
cry when footsteps enter their room
at night; this is to the girls
who love by cutting their hearts
into snowflakes and watching
them melt. I left you behind and
I can't be sorry for that.

you are the type of beautiful
that kindly asks the world
to fuck off. the days we buried
have decomposed, headstones are
snapshots; sanitized breakdowns,
rusty tongues, sighs laced
with fear, I love you, I love
you. saturdays were the best
because we could sleep through
the nightmare. you painted me a
picture of the world with your words
and they made us wash it away
for being transparent.

we were afraid of nothing
but the monsters in our eyelids.
back then, we counted days
like shooting stars; it took 67
to wish myself away. this
is for you, skygazer; I keep you
in my fingers because you
slipped through the holes in
my heart.
today, i write a letter
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fernknits Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Truly amazing.  And heartbreaking.  I love it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm honored, thank you <3
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aidanmo Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
omg this is beautiful :judge: 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! <3
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wannabeliterate Featured By Owner May 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer

To me, this sounds like the speaker trying to comfort a former self and its companions who are still stuck somewhere along a road between perdition and enlightenment. But the comfort rings hollow, since the speaker has evolved to become one of the idols of his former self... and as time and growing older only works in one way, the whole thing crashes in a formidable cul-de-sac of hopes and expectations...

This is so very lovely written. Every time when I think by now you must have spilled your heart out to the last drop, you shove another thought, another idea, another facet of yourself right into my face. I can't imagine that the energetic and enticing well of your creative mind will ever dry up. Baby, you're the best!  

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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're so wonderful <3 thank you
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Chipchinka Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014   Writer
Woah!
This is one of the most intense pieces of writing I've read in a long time...it's a tour-de-force in all of the best possible ways!  Reading this was less like sitting down, looking at squiggles on a white background; it was a journey into a world that's quite familiar, and yet...refined to an unfamiliar, yet potent and emotional degree.  Brilliant!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i'm so happy to hear that, thank you!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014   General Artist
i agree with glossolalias completely maddie sweetheart :tighthug:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you all are too lovely to me :blush:
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DetoxingDeath Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
For some reason this hit me close and hard, I couldn't help but out laughing at this line though
"you are the type of beautiful
that kindly asks the world
to fuck off."
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
haha thank you <3
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is one of the most beautiful pieces I've read. :huggle:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
that means so much to me
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle:
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aah, the second stanza. :heart: 
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Wanderlings Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing; it speaks to me. :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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zoefletcher Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh this is why you are my favourite poet :heart: this one in particular seems to have a lovely rhythm to it, which i love. also the imagery and word choice is astoundingly beautiful. oh god please never stop writing :worship:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i will try not to :love:
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"you painted me a
picture of the world with your words
and they made us wash it away
for being transparent..."

I missed the enchanting bitter-sweetness that exudes from your lines; the way it creeps into your being to find a soft spot and nestle comfortably.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You welcome :love:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student Writer
I wish I could wrap your words around me like a blanket I'd never let go of.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconcontradictory55:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Student Writer
:love:
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CapedCowboyKat Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
This is absolutely beautiful.
You are a magnificent writer.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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NeverGivingUp0 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I love all of your work. I admire the way you use words so powerfully. I hope that one day I'll be able to write as powerfully as you do.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're too kind <3 thank you
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ScarletLily101 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Although, this wouldn't exactly speak to me personally, this is absolutely beautiful. Well done~! I aspire to write the same way as you and many other brilliant writers do. <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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Perfling Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Student General Artist
:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't even have words, really. :heart: This is beautiful.

Also, I completely agree with glossolalias.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
although darker poetry tends to weary me with its prevalence, i like that this sends a message; i know many people with problems who could relate to this
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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sasori-the-dreamer Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014
You are gifted with words! This is beautiful
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014
your style hasn't rotted. it's refined itself. you're not some organic juice that's been sitting in the fridge for a month. more like brandy in a wooden barrel.

i digress: beautiful. absolutely.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love: that's all i ever wanted
thank you
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Piiim Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014   Photographer
that last verse beyond beautiful :love:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014
i knew a girl like this. thank you.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3 thank you
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