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tonight I ask myself:
 where are you going with all these names
 in your pockets? syllables that taste
 unauthentic in the desperate American
 mouth.


    repression is a series of images


  golden streetlights
  blinking
  pedantically

    earthbound angels breathing
    flame, starving hands speaking
    in tongues, glazed eyes
    asking are you fucking okay

       pale skin becoming moonlight,
       reflecting and refracting and

  the quiet understatement
  of listless
  lips.
  mutual poison.
i'm working in images i'm trying something new

this is unnavigated territory
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DevilsMatrix Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Student Writer
where are you going with all these names
 in your pockets? syllables that taste
 unauthentic in the desperate American
 mouth.


    repression is a series of images


This whole first section completely captured me, I think this one is by far my favorite of yours so far :D The imagery is just fantastic! You should definitely write more like this, It has such an impact on the reader.. well, at least for me it did.   reflecting and refracting - Clever wording, this line runs together so smoothly and gives it such a pretty feel. Pretty words with a darker aftertaste, my favorite :3
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2014
wow..you're a genius. "pale skin becoming moonlight"-very romantic :)
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery is really stunning.

I do want to say that "pale skin becoming moonlight" seems a little out of place here because it just reads as more...hmm, what's the word...[insert 2 minute pause here while thinking] cliche than the rest of the imagery you have here. Because the rest of it reads really unique and authentic. Just my two cents there though, take it or leave it. :)

Again, you're amazing and so is this.
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014   Writer
unf. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely lovely. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this working in images. It's beautiful. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
good :love: it's something i want to experiment with more
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Cry0freeze Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
Fantastic!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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herbodyismycoffin Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014   Writer
i love love love this.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ah thank youu :love:
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herbodyismycoffin Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014   Writer
you're welcome!
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Leah084 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
Amazingly done! <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Quite the nice imagery provided in this work. The title suits the work as well.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
breathtaking. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Student Writer
I adore every single word of this. :heart: Keep going, you're doing amazing.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :love:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner May 16, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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alleunnil Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Student Writer
almost x'ed out of the tab before i saw this, glad i didn't
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i'm glad <3
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014   Writer
it's working
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
it's happeningggg
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"the quiet understatement
of listless
lips."

That's a zinger. :) Well done, my dear. :+fav:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ahh i'm so glad, thank you!
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Perfling Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Student General Artist
I love it, especially the first stanza.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :love:
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