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there's scar tissue in her throat,
swollen around the words she never said;
dark rings around her eyes
like planets unremembered, and
a staleness to her touch,
the crystalline Dead Sea.

she's living like a story
that's already been told
"if no one loved you
would you mean anything at all?"

in that moment,
we forget to exist.
"that's kind of a depressing thought

if no one loved you

would you mean anything?" -Brent

(I'm trying to perfect the art of short poems, I know I'm not quite there)

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NikkiNoonarr Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
The first two lines are incredible, as a whole, its amazing. This has a beautiful sadness to it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm honored to hear that :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013   General Artist
so happy to see this with a DLD! :love:
congratulations, maddiedoll! :huggle:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :tighthug:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013   General Artist
but of course, oh, beautiful and brilliant soul! :iconsquishhugplz: :heart: :heart: :heart:
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013   Writer
Congratulations on your DLD! :clap:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! it's such an honor! :heart:
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013   Writer
You're very welcome! It was well earned. :)
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Student Writer
there's an infinity in this, or maybe it's because that last line left me wanting the way Perks of Being a Wallflower did. great work. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahh, thank you :love:
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