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we are not a fairytale.

I am not the strong lead with a heart of fire,
bones of steel, and eyes of vapid curiosity;
motivation seeping through
my every last intended action because
I was written this way

(the heroine falls only to rise again:
proverbial phoenix, burning out
because it is the cycle of my
life) and you, you are not

the beautiful travesty, perfectly composed
to strike me where I’m weak and
[almost]human, delicately woven
like the tapestry of my dismantling—
a subtle irony where somewhere, a writer
chuckles softly, understanding

we are blinder than church mice, born
in a makeshift world of darkness where
I’m not sure whether or not the sun will
rise again tomorrow, because it won’t exist
until someone breathes life into it,

but no. we were never so lucky
to be carefully orchestrated,
a composition rendered for
another’s satisfaction. I am not the
climax, nor the resolution, but a lamb
with Stockholm Syndrome and
a tendency towards people
with sharp teeth. and you, you

are not word and reason but
flesh and blood, the unimaginative
catalyst for my undoing.
it'd be a lot easier if you could screw up and say "sorry, I was written this way; but don't worry, there's a happy ending eventually"

edit: DLD Pick of the Day [link]
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:icontheimaginativeauthor:
Theimaginativeauthor Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2014
nicely done, if you have time you can read my poetry as well it will mean a lot.
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:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Student Writer
Reality is never as the stories would have them. (did that make sense?)

I love how everything comes together in your writing.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that makes perfect sense, real life is never storybook pretty. thank you :heart:
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LookingGlassInk Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
Truly spectacular. I've always liked the idea of life having save points that you can go back to and remember to dodge the screw up on the next go around, but I love this even more. Thanks for sharing. Wonderful!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I used to wish life could be like that so you could start over whenever you screwed up, haha. thank you so much :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
Fabulous. :heart:

Congrats on the DLD, lovie. :la:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're so sweet :tighthug:
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this is really well-constructed. I love the word choice and idea. Great poem!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm delighted you think so, thank you!
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IrishTemper Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's a difficult thing to admit and even then achieve when writing, that true happy endings are few and far between, and they are so rarely achieved without running the gauntlet first. This was beautiful. well done! =D
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner May 31, 2013   General Artist
You should know by now how naturally gifted you are at writing gorgeously! :love:
Congratulations on the DLD, dear heart! :tighthug:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are too sweet :icontighthug:
thank you so much! :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013   General Artist
you are most welcome, maddiedoll :heart: :heart: :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
omg what is this i can't even hug properly
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner May 30, 2013   Writer
Congratulations on the DLD "Pick of the Day"! Already fav'd and appreciated. :D
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're so lovely! :tighthug: thank you for the suggestion, it means the world to me :huggle:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner May 31, 2013   Writer
You're quite welcome. :hug:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner May 30, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our “Pick of the Day”. It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my goodness, what an honor :love:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
we were never so lucky
to be carefully orchestrated,
a composition rendered for
another’s satisfaction. I am not the
climax, nor the resolution, but a lamb
with Stockholm Syndrome and
a tendency towards people
with sharp teeth. and you, you

are not word and reason but
flesh and blood, the unimaginative
catalyst for my undoing.


:heart: I love that. I love it completely.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i love you :love:
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well I love you right back. (:
And heeeeey, congrats on the DLD! :la:
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SeraiFog Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Student General Artist
Amazing piece! and yes... I agree! "It'd be a lot easier if you could screw up and say "sorry, I was written this way"
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you
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Blue-iPod Featured By Owner May 29, 2013
wow. this is fantastic. beyond fantastic. i'm blown away. i loved it. thoroughly . . . and wow. amazing.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that means the world, thank you so much! :heart:
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littlemp Featured By Owner May 29, 2013
This is amazing :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :love:
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Carlie-Martece Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Professional General Artist
Amazing work Xx
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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echoscall Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Student Artist
I lik this. I think I will camp out here a while.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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echoscall Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Student Artist
You are welcome. Enjoy your style.
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puddlesaregrowing Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
good stuff
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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spearofhope Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, now this was striking. A remarkable and enjoyable conceit can make any poem enjoyable, but this one was so well constructed and moving around that central concept that it was all the better. I'm very impressed - this is how Poetry SHOULD be.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
what a lovely compliment, I'm honored you feel that way. thank you!
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Iam-Dreamfire Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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moonstruckbyshadow Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I feel the same sentiments in this as I do in my On Your Way Out. This stirring acknowledgement to some grim facts of life with maybe a dash of undertoned resentment.

Also on another note: I can't tell if this poem is addressing reality in a fantastical way to make obstacles more approachable or defining a nightmarish reality that we all must face.

Thought provoking and as always a pleasure.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I definitely see how you could connect the two. And I think it depends on your own outlook on life which meaning you decide to pick up.

Thank you :heart:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner May 25, 2013
Ah mah gawd I love this. :tighthug: :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :huggle:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner May 25, 2013
Anytime. :love:
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MelodieRox Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this so much. :love:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :heart:
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MelodieRox Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery. :drool:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thankyousomuch :la:
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