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I could make a story out of
this. The blackout epiphanies
blinding me like a total eclipse
of any sense of rationality I ever
stole out from my parents' blind spots
when they turned the other way. The
boy I fell half in love with and
my therapist's unassuming questions
about why he was different, the way I
was never beautiful to him but he
still looked me in my bokeh eyes,
betraying and quiet, so that was enough.
My vain addiction to anything
permanently damaging and
more or less glamorous. The dreams
I can’t swallow no matter what shade
of delusion they come in, about
the imminent death of stars named
after deader lovers, and places
where the air is intoxicated with
the promise of Ecstasy, or whatever
name heaven goes by after you begin to doubt
the reality of putting one foot in front
of the other will get you anywhere at all.

I could write novels about my path
to self-martyrification and the moments
I cried for no reason except that
I had no reason tor cry. I could write
a million dedications no one
ever asked for, to the boy who’s more
scar tissue than man, or to the girl
who sits alone in the library
reading people like dirty magazines
and ends up disgusted with what
she sees, or to that watercolor child
on the better half of the mirror.

I could write so many poems
about my salty lungs and aching
stomach and blossoming wrists,
I could tell the whole fucking world
what it is to be in love with all these
people that never existed and
to resent the ones that do, what it is
to buy lessons on how to live. I could
make something worthwhile out
of every second I wasted mourning
catastrophes coming to life inside
my ribcage (you needed this.

here’s my poem about
the things that keep me going.)
i need to leave a legacy
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I cried a little when I read this, and more when I got to the end.

This is just so powerful. And so are you. :heart:
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butter-holiday Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014
I really like this. Excellent writing :)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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earthian101 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014
Your poems are always fantastic, and I have so much respect for you as a writer. This is absolutely beautiful, and it feels very honest, and raw.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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Tyrison Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
Honesty is more beautiful, especially when it hurts.

Wonderful.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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AdrianMinotaur Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Artists have a special nature to turn tragedy into triumph, suffering into bliss, pain into song. You've more then proven yourself an amazing artist and creator by this poem! :)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're so kind! :love: thank you!
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TheIcey-Love Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well damn, again, another brilliant and striking poem you've created. Seriously, bravo. This is beauty+fav  
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :heart:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Student Writer
And as a legacy, as a reminder you were here and existed and felt and thought and loved and lost, it is just so... stars have nothing compared to your brilliance.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are far too lovely :heart:
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:iconcontradictory55:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Student Writer
And you are far too stunning for words :hug:
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013
I'm glad that you have the ability to leave a legacy because someone needs to, and most of us can't. =p
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha I haven't had the ability yet, I hope it's something age will grant me
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:iconcarmalain7:
Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013
You're a hell of a lot closer than you think.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're precious <3
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MeganAshleysArt Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing, as always <3
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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Cocoa-Kitsune Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
This is amazing and strikingly beautiful and well very well written. You got vivid emotions and feelings down in every line. Really great work!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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Aircaliburr Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely amazing!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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CloMailen Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
so beautiful and sad well done !!!!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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Tassadar723 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
Thank you for sharing this. It seems to me that most of the popular written pieces here on DA that make the front page are usually very "emo" but rarely actually say anything. They're vain without being exact.

THIS, on the other hand, is a sincere melancholic brilliant. I'm picking up what you're putting down. Understand you 100 percent (at least, the "you" that is presented in this one piece). Well done lass. Mae govannen.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! It's always nice to be understood <3
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Duck-Pwincess Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
I'm not sure I can get the words right but this is breathtakingly beautiful, in that sharp and haunting way that perhaps only painful things can be... Thankyou for sharing.  I hope everything's ok.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really appreciate that, thank you <3
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zoefletcher Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're making me cry again Waaaah!  but in a good way-ish. beautiful as always Heart 
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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Songs-of-black-roses Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Student Writer
Overwhelmingly beautiful.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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Perfling Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Student General Artist
and the moments
I cried for no reason except that
I had no reason tor cry.

reading people like dirty magazines
and ends up disgusted with what
she sees

what it is
to buy lessons on how to live


Damn.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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JakesException Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013
"I could write so many poems 
about my salty lungs and aching 
stomach and blossoming wrists, 
I could tell the whole fucking world
what it is to be in love with all these 
people that never existed and
to resent the ones that do, what it is
to buy lessons on how to live. I could
make something worthwhile out
of every second I wasted mourning"

AKA About 90% of the stuff in my Gallery.
Well written. Hope your mental state heals eventually.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
don't worry, it's about 100% of mine. and thank you. that means a lot from you
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Student General Artist
...wow.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Student General Artist
Everything you write is like a beautiful punch to the stomach. I know that doesn't make much sense, but I swear it's a compliment.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahh that's what I strive for :heart: thank you
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Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Student General Artist
Always welcome. :heart:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Student Writer
this is beautiful; just life everything else you write. :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahh that means so much to me, you're so talented and inspirational :love:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Student Writer
i'm glad :heart: thank you. 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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