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March 30


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sleepwalking with stars
like bulletwounds, tonight
is for wandering and
loving people I’ve never met.
I have a hole in my heart for
the boy on my bus who balances
the world on his chin as he sleeps.
I’m drawn to a sunshine girl leaking
beams every time she opens her
mouth to smile. and still, I follow
a boy who walks across clouds;
I want to ask him to send me up
like a balloon.

ways I need to be loved:
a hand heavy on my hip to remind me
gravity is more than an ideal, a
soft kiss to bring me back from
other galaxies, a calm whisper
when I’ve run out of words
but the silence is too

I’m severely broken up,
fragments of words and
heartscraps and sky-pieces;
crawling backwards through
open windows trying to find
a home. I’m trying but
I was untaught how to
function, I’m trying to
be correct. I’m trying to
be normal. I’m trying to
be correct. I’m trying.

words I need to hear:
I Love You. i love you
i love you i love you i love you
( i was never what you expected )
probably crap, but i'm writing

i romanticize people far too often
i watch this one boy walk from class to class and i swear to god he's on another planet, i want to be there with him
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SuddenlyAutumn Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2014
ahh. i just love this :heart:
AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I haven't read a poem of this quality for weeks. Thank you for this <3 I particularly love the imagery it evokes; the positive and negative contrasts in i. reveal a sense of uncertainty (like the character is trying to balance who they really are and who they are trying to be). Beautifully written <3
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner May 19, 2014   General Artist
you and your effing extraordinary experimentation skills
always getting it right the first time, U FO REALZ? :stare:
wonderfully worded and suitably structured poem you have here, madlove :heart:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much for your support <3 i'm glad to hear it worked
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014   General Artist
my pleasure, petal <3
CodeMan249 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014
Crap? wow well id say if this is crap then my work needs to be burned with fire this piece is beautiful and brings tears to my eyes. It makes me think of myself and the things ive gone through. Id say romanticizing is a beutiful thing and it can never be done too much. live life how you see it fit and love yourself for it.
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much for your advice and kindness <3
EclipticSnowLeopard Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is epic and beautifully written. I feel it's easy to relate to, and very sincere. Well done!!
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student Writer
Being redundant here, but NOT CRAP. Frankly, it is beautiful, you are beautiful, and even better is that the way you see others is beautiful. Every word you string together is like this intricate necklace of beads one didn't expect to be beautiful but together, they are.
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